Cong and Peter,
Thanks for
sending these. I will incorporate them along with other comments that arise in the
final draft.
Jon
______________________
Jon Dettling
Great Lakes Commission
734-971-9135
dettling@glc.org
From: Cong Doan
[mailto:doanco@rogers.com]
Sent: Tuesday, February 20, 2007
10:38 AM
To: Jon Dettling
Cc: Peter Wong
Subject: Fwd: RE: revised b(a)p
report
Peter has few more comments
on the report version 11:
1/ Page 7, Figure 4(a). Top point (14,621 lb) should be updated to (11,542 lb).
2/ Page 14, Section
Conclusions, last sentence: replace word ‘trends with something else
(regional BaP emissions between years?). We discouraged readers not to do trend
analysis.
3/ Page 15, Section ‘Trends’:
replace heading ‘Trends’ with something else (Emission comparison
[between years]?). There are no emission trends between inventory years so try
to avoid using that word although it is mentioned in the heading just for
discussion.
4/ Page 16, second sentence: replace
‘clear’ with ‘apparent’ in ‘While there is a
clear trend …’
5/ Page 16, last paragraph, first sentence:
replace ‘trend’ with ‘emission changes [between
years]?’
6/ Page 18, Heading: replace ‘General
trends’ with ‘Factors/Initiatives causing changes’
7/ Page 18, replace ‘?’ with
‘no data/NA/something else’
8/ In general, since we are reporting
Benzo(a)Pyrene only (not 211 pollutants), it’s practical to round all
numbers in all state/province summary tables to nearest ones with proper comma
separators (table 2, table 3, table 4).
Table 3 looks good and informative and
hopefully there will be no more changes …! heading to the FINAL ....
Jon Dettling <dettling@glc.org> wrote:
Hi group,
I've posted a revision to the report that reflects the reduced forest fire
emissions for ON and includes them for MN.
http://glin.net/forum/view.php?site=glad&bn=glad_rapids&key=1171675381
I believe I've updated all the appropriate numbers in the next and figures,
but will do a double-check next week.
Jon
______________________
Jon Dettling
Great Lakes
Commission
734-971-9135
dettling@glc.org
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